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A Vampire's Love
Prologue and Chapter One
Prologue
"Hey. Wait up!" I call to my best friend Kai. My name is Kayuki Sou. I'm eighteen years old, and this is the story of how I fell in love with a Vampire.
Chapter One : A Vampire's Love
"Hey Kayuki! What's up?" Says Kai giving me a giant hug. "Not much. You?" "I'm just hanging out with my cousin. He's visiting for a while and then he's going to live with me for atleast two or three years." "What's your cousin's name?" I ask in curosity. "Oh. His name is Alexander. He's somewhere around here." "Ok. Well, see you later Kai." "See ya Kayuki!" I walk down a path in a forest. I sense a presense somewhere near me. I quickly turn around. "H...Hello? Who's there?" I look around everywhere. Then, that's when I first saw him. A tall figure leaning against a tree in a black cloak. His brown spiky hair sticking out in all directons. His eyes open, green eyes staring at me. The thing I knew, was that I should run. But I couldn't. I was staring into the eyes of a total stranger. What I didn't know was that I was staring into the eyes of a Vampire.
- by sakura_1258 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 10/26/2008 |
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- Title: A Vampire's Love
- Artist: sakura_1258
- Description: My Vampire story. : A Vampire's Love.
- Date: 10/26/2008
- Tags: vampires love
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Daisy_Sakura - 07/17/2011
- very interesting smile i like it
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- iliandra1000 - 08/31/2009
- intresting
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- epic_steph_franklin - 08/30/2009
- it's really interesting but you need to be more descriptive about your other characters and not just the vampire.
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- Gravetye - 02/17/2009
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So...Kayuki and Kai both sound like Japanese names. Are they? And if so, are the characters Japanese? Or did you just randomly give them these names for no real purpose?
Also, try giving your work paragraphs and more description. And--I hate to say this--more originality. Sigh. If you're going to do vampire fiction, make the story your own, yeah? - Report As Spam
- beautyisgone - 02/10/2009
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It's okay. You need to be more descriptive and explain what Kai looks like. Write more becuase if this is all for the first chapter thats pretty short. So keep writing and again remember be more descriptive!
Bye xox ttyl -Tinaa - Report As Spam
- CaRtMaN_RoX_BuTt_ - 02/04/2009
- really good maybe ill post sumthin later smile
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- Cat-Girl1012 - 12/07/2008
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I like it a lot!! ^^
I will read the rest too!!!
5/5!! - Report As Spam