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Two 16 year old girls were walking along a road one night. they were trying to get a ride.they saw a light coming and then a pain in thier necks. they look and see blood dripping down thier necks. then they went unconconcios.
When they woke up they were in dark, inclosed box. they were in a coffin. when they finnally got out of the coffins, they saw an attractive woman with long fangs. the first girl tired to speak but somehow the woman was speaking in thier minds. "you are my children. i have given you a gift of imoortal life and undenible attractivenis. you have become a vampire. i am saphire the queen of the vampires. i am your mother now. your new names are ruby and dimond." somehow the girls belived her.
to be continued...
- by hamstermamm |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/31/2008 |
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- Title: vampire awaked
- Artist: hamstermamm
- Description: the queen of the vampires and her "children".
- Date: 07/31/2008
- Tags: vampires
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Rozen Black Chronicles - 09/20/2008
- your creativity sucks
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- selket16 - 07/31/2008
- interesting beginning, but it could be fleshed out a bit more, this seems more like an outline than a story
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- Shiny Luminosity - 07/31/2008
- I'd like it more if it was longer and had a spell-checker.
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- Fireblood90 - 07/31/2008
- Bit short but if theres a more parts thats great not very good with the vocabulary but I'm not youre judge im just a veiwer I give you 4 stars.
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