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“Shoot, I’m late for school again!” I said as I rushed through the halls right after the bell had rung.
“Thank you for finally joining us, Kevin,” Mrs. Rosehall said with a stern look as I rushed into my seat.
“I’m sorry Mrs. Rosehall, I missed the bus.”
“Well, now that you finally joined us I believe we can start my lesson.” Mrs. Rosehall replied.
She soon started getting off topic after some minutes and started talking about the importance of coming to school on time when I fell asleep. I dreamt about a familiar place. I had no idea why it was so familiar, but I felt like I’ve been here before. I don’t know why it was familiar because the houses were on clouds and basically the ground was clouds.
I saw a young lady who had brown hair with bright golden eyes carrying two babies in her arms running away, as if she was being chased. I tried to see what was chasing her when I saw a tall dark haired man about 6 ft tall chasing her with a look in his eye that was extremely frightening.
I finally understood what people said that looks can kill.
The Man was about to finally catch the woman when a flash of light emitted itself from the babies, making them disappear.
"Where did you send them?!” the man hissed.
“A different world! You’ll never find them. I separated them just to make sure.” she taunted the man, grinning madly.
“You fool!” shouted the Man, then gaining an evil glint in his eye.
“Your death was sealed the moment the twins disappeared,” the Man said wickedly. With incredible speed he took out a dagger and stabbed her in the heart.
The woman’s dying words were “Be safe my children.”
- by xxSora1144 |
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- | Submitted on 12/01/2008 |
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- Title: Spiritual Twins (part one)
- Artist: xxSora1144
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Description:
This is a book im writting for fun
Kevin's life was pretty avarage and normal
that is before he gets this dream about a woman and twins
little did he know that his dream and his upcoming 13th birthday will change his life forever
- Date: 12/01/2008
- Tags: twins spirits elements thesun moon
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Comments (4 Comments)
- xxSora1144 - 12/02/2008
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hmmmm i'm sort of introducing the characters in part two
so maybe i wont do a prologue
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- Luna_luna8 - 12/01/2008
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actually i think this way is good to start off.
you can introduce your characters when your talking.
kinda like i do.
i dont have a whole introduction of whole the ppl are!
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- xxSora1144 - 12/01/2008
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hmmmm ok i'll write a prologue for the beginning of my story
this is my first time writting a story outside of school - Report As Spam
- Kyrene1079 - 12/01/2008
- pretty good, but you're missing an introduction. And just so you know, when I say "introduction" I mean a section of the story, preferably (if not always) the begining, when you take the time to let your readers get a grip on thier surroundings. Just add a bit off description here and there before you launch into the main plot.
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