- Long ago in a small village there was a girl named Rose she was the prettiest girl in the whole village . She had slender curves, long flowing black hair, green eyes that glittered like emeralds, her button nose, and of course her lips were of an angels because of her looks guys came from across the land to marry her but she turned them all down. Her father who was the toymaker in the village asked her " Rose what is wrong with all of these men that wish to marry you ?" Rose responded " They don't love me father that is their problem. They wish to marry because I am pretty." One day a prince came to the village and asked for the village's prettiest woman when Rose stepped forth he asked to wed her and she responded " why should I marry you I don't know you and you wish to marry me because I am pretty." The prince thought for a minute " You should marry me because if you do you will be my queen and you can have anything you want." "that is no reason to marry you." Rose yelled at him. " Good Day." said Rose storming in to her house. That night her father asked her "Rose my dearest daughter why did you turn down the prince?" " Father you know why because he doesn't love me." "But he has promised plenty of money to wed him." "Father all it is with you is money!" Rose screamed leaving the house. When Rose started to cross the street she tripped as a carriage was crossing and crushing her. The next day they had her funeral when every one had left her father set a doll on her grave it too had slender curves, long flowing black hair, green eyes that glittered like emeralds, her button nose, and the lips of an angel. He set the doll on Rose's grave and said "What have I done I'm a monster." Then as the rain started to fall he had a heart attack and died. Still to this day in that little village the doll sits on her grave.
- by Czarinia Lionheart |
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- | Submitted on 07/15/2008 |
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- Title: The Doll
- Artist: Czarinia Lionheart
- Description: This is a story that is sad that I wrote one day in school.
- Date: 07/15/2008
- Tags: rosesad
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Xxradioactive_muffinxX - 02/23/2010
- Definitely separate it into paragraphs. Also, can you think of some way to make it more intriguing? I got bored of it by the end. It's a good plot, though.
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- LolliFrogg - 03/27/2009
- lol i agrre with izzy more paragraphs and commas my eyes hurt but all in all good story good job
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- Izzy of the Insane - 07/15/2008
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The story itself, I liked but... I've got two things to say. One, use some commas, geez.
two, You typed it as one big paragraph. For some people, this can be hard on the eyes, and overall, it's just not very neat. - Report As Spam
- I n f a t u a t ii o n - 07/15/2008
- o.o'
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