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My name is Zandred. I have power unlike anything anyone has ever seen.
I was once a mere mortal and feared death, until I met Death himself. He came to me in a weakened state. He wanted me to restore him to power by collecting souls.
"You are the only one who can do this," he told me.
"I will do it... for a price," I told him
"I want power over death," I bargained.
"It will be done," he replied.
Over the course of the next few years I collected thousands of souls. I finally collected enough souls four years later. I called for Death to come to me.
"Good," he crooned, "I only need one more soul."
"Who's?," I asked.
"YOURS," He screamed with an evil laugh.
Next thing I knew I was laying on the ground in an unfamiliar place.
Suddenly Death appeared in front of me. "Your wish has been granted," he said before disappearing.
I was suddenly back in my home, but my face felt different. I looked in the mirror and the front of my face looked like a skull. All of the sudden I felt power well up inside me. I went out to the graveyard and brought forth an army of skeleton warriors. "Yes," I said as I led them toward the city, knowing I was finally immortal.
- by Demon Blood 1993 |
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- | Submitted on 07/20/2008 |
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- Title: Death Immortal
- Artist: Demon Blood 1993
- Description: Many fear Death, but no one has ever actually seen him... until now.
- Date: 07/20/2008
- Tags: death magic shortstory
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Comments (7 Comments)
- StarburstCherushii - 09/26/2010
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:/ 1/5
This story really needs some revision... The plot is very choppy and lacks creativity; it basically sounds like you watched various horror movies and scribbled down some cliche summary of them. The main character is very unoriginal, in other words, a "Gary Stu". Now, I won't argue about the way you look at Death; however, the character "Death" is also very unoriginal and cliche. Try mixing it up a bit, add some creativity. - Report As Spam
- Animegirl3213 - 04/13/2009
- hn..could've turned into a vampire, then that would've been even better..but it's good..
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- Halie895 - 02/17/2009
- this is very sudden
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- gaeaslilbarafrog - 07/21/2008
- This is really nice, but longer would be nice, too.
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- Demon Blood 1993 - 07/21/2008
- I plan to make it longer eventually, but right now I'm working on another.
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- weoifnekjqtqt4295701234 - 07/21/2008
- It is a cool story, but it needs to be longer and less choppy. You have a great idea. Write some more and take honors English.
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- ferbreez_ninja - 07/20/2008
- Wow that is a cool story!I like it you should actually make a longer story of this and be more detailish biggrin And then you will have a great story right there!
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