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Prolog:
It started 5 months ago that she came to our small town on that agonizing day that she changed my life. Before she came here life was boring and the same every day, nothing happened, ABSOLUTLY NOTHING, not even crime happened here so we didnt need cops or anything like that. Day after day it was always the same, till she came to town and changed it all.
My name's Alexander Duvario The Twelth, but you can call me Alex. I'm a 15 year old teenager, tall about 5'9" with messy brunett hair and green eyes, most people would describe me as either emo, or loner. I live in a small town called Saldovan, its a small town far away from any other civization because its completly secluded by many giant mountains surounding the town. How she got here still amazes me even though shes gone.
I miss her, I still think of all the things we did together and all the times she beat me up. You know whats crazy? I never really liked her, yet i can't stand living wihtout her now. If i try hard enough i can still smell that disguesting lavender perfume she wore, even though up untill she left it always made me gag.
Chapter 1: What now?
I stand on the balcony of my hospital room crying histaricaly, i just made it out of a war, i was a hero, but to me im nothing more then a lonely boy. In my bandaged right hand i hold a light lavender scarf stained with blood. "Why Star, why?" i ask myself as it starts to rain hiding my tears as it chases the few people on the streets into buildings and into their homes. The rain gets harder, every drop on my skin burns me like a hot iron but i do not move. I looked to the skys crying still i hear a familiar voice next to me, but i know the one speaking isn't truely their, its impossible for her to be here.
'I'll always be here for ya Alex, even if you dont want me to, got that dweeb! Hehe and ill always be taller then you to!'
I look to the heavens and say "You lied, your not here anymore, you lied to me, YOU LIED TO ME AND NOW YOUR NOT HERE ANYMORE! YOU LYING WITCH! HOW COULD YOU LEAVE ME ALONE LIKE THIS!"
I fell to my knees as my tears flow uncontrolably hard and i can hardly breath, the harder i cried the redder my tears became, untill they were completely nothing but blood.
- by DarkPrincessMidna |
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- | Submitted on 08/04/2008 |
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- Artist: DarkPrincessMidna
- Description: prolog and first quarter of chapter 1. CRITISIZE MY WORK PLEASE!!!!!!!!
- Date: 08/04/2008
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- L Gary Oldman - 08/04/2008
- You really need to edit your work before you post it - serious spelling and grammar errors, tense problems. Once that is cleared up we can address the problems inside the work itself. If you would like help, I am willing to do so, pm me.
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- xXMCRAngel2107Xx - 08/04/2008
- oh and BTW bottom comment first ^^'
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