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City of Railo 2nd biggest city in the world 1200 pm
"our story takes place in a world of clotoria where humans have found a more useful source of power, their cities, houses, everything is powered crystals named gry stal. gry stals supply companies are looked upon as "the wonderful future" but is that true? lately there have been reports of deaths mining for the crystals sabotage who knows. Enough of that though we will start of with the life of me yes me the guy who has been narrating my name is Rai and I should really start my test its been some time already"
Rai looked at the clock there was only 5 minutes of the entrance exam left and he was barely 3/4s finished, under the stress he cracked "CRAP I CAN'T FINISH THIS TEST CAN'T CAN'T CAN'T!"
"Silence, Rai even if you can't do it there are others better than you who can so let them finish in peace." the teacher spoke in a cracked sort of tone, a type of tone that will scare anything in its wake. Rai gave up he answered all the question as fast as he could. "I can't fail i won't be able to go with my friends to work as gry stal refiners, my friends, the money i could make" the bell struck, He turned the test in, now all he can do is wait and see how bad he failed.
leaving the exam room he raced of to meet his friends in the usual place the hobby shop ran by Mitari‘s parents. Mitari his best friend since kindergarten has always supported him even though he is nearly a complete failure at everything, P.E, math, music, sports name it he can't do it.
Walking along rolling roar came to him “oh there’s Mitari……… she is ganna tackle me what joy” the ramming of Mitari’s shoulder pushed Rai forward just enough to make fall over. “wow Rai you haven’t even tried to get stronger guess you’ll always be like this” Mitari seemed to tease Rai like this but she never intended to hurt him in any way and she’s really nice most of the time. “ well I would if I didn’t know you are ganna tackle me harder if I get stronger, and besides exams tired me out they put so much on the job entrance exams” groaned Rai as he got up “ Excuses that’s all you ever think up of, well I just hope will succeed in what we all promised to apply for…” “Gry stall refinery” both said “ I know now its where the big money making is and is supposed to be a fun process” as Rai rambled on about how things can change over time and there could be a new type of energy they can use as usual Mitari paid no attention to him. “ what ever now we are going to up with daro and koto!” commanded Mitari almost second nature Rai obliged “ I hope I passed grumbled Rai.
Half way around the world 300 am
“ sir we have found 1000 dna matches to the ones you specified from the records shall we begin the operation demon?”
“no narrow that down to the 20 strongest ones and bring them in for testing I need the best for this to work, the power of the gry stals fused with these dna will create the next step of human evolution……. Well…. START NARROWING DOWN THE D*** list”
“YY…YYYES SIRE RIGHT AWAY SIR!”
End ch.1
- by shinfa12147 |
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- | Submitted on 10/05/2008 |
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- Title: my world
- Artist: shinfa12147
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Description:
just a little story i made up when i was really bored hope you like
if you like it ill post more of it
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some of the names i made are kinda of lame sorry but i kept everything in my head had to keep things kind of simple.
if you think there are somethings that can be fixed please tell me i really want to get this stroy well written i really like if you dont well dont read it anymore. - Date: 10/05/2008
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Comments (2 Comments)
- jessa808 - 01/20/2009
- improvement on spelling and grammar will do.
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- Fipll - 10/05/2008
- Very good story line. You need to improve your grammar and spelling. Punctuation would be good to improve. Overall, 2 stars.
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