Loneliness

• Artist: Deus Ex Insula
• Description: Actually "Because Then No One Can Help You" but it was two characters too long >.>
  Started out as an idea for a preface for my poetry but turned into something much different, maybe better.
• Date: 02/05/2009
• Tags: loneliness

Never in all my life have I been so lonely. It's a dark, empty feeling that you can't get rid of no matter how hard you try. It's like dying everyday. It feels like something eating away at your soul, slowly, painfully, taking its time. Trying to make you suffer as much as possible. Making you feel every terrible blow.
It's a feeling that's always with you. You can't kill it; trying only makes it that much worse. It feeds on all your good emotions, destroying them all one by one. You feel that if you kill your emotions, maybe it won't be able to hurt you. Maybe it will go away.
But it doesn't. It never does. It leaves you a broken, empty shell of a person, with no emotions and a black soul. It will leave you disconnected from the world. Because then no one can help you.

No one except for the person who left you alone...

Comments

[Bells_44]

wow...it is sad...u could try & put some names in, as in characters... but its still good as is...

[ReadBetweenMyLines]

The last sentance of the first paragraph is a fragment, put a semi colon before it to link it. Other than that it was wonderful.

[Deus Ex Insula]

wow, thanks for criticzing without giving me any kind of feedback on how I could do better or what could be better. thanks so much!

[-_Cuthbert-of-Eld_-]

Very lackluster.

[meerodi]

It's sad! It's poetic but I can see why you put it in the fiction catagory. Overall, it's sweet and good!

[1800 Troller]

Sad -_- 3/5 Since Its Sad..I Dont Like Sad Stuff...If I Did Id Give You A 5...But Who Does.