zeke

• Artist: BrandonHaruno
• Description: a bunch of mythical creatures in this short story that ill finish when i grow up and try to publish
• Date: 03/12/2009
• Tags: vampireswerewolfs

I was riding through a town on a horse heading for the forest while my eyes go from red to pitch black as someone notices they ask what happend to my eyes ,but, i dont answer. Then out of nowere somthing runing faster then a turbojet smacked into me. " Who are you ?" i asked. as the thing slowed down "u can see me at that speed lets talk in the woods" he pointed to a forest to the north. "ok but whats your name?" I asked "Tao yours?" he answered "zeke." i said calmly and we started walking and then a fullmoon spoted and he started staring at it geting haryer " what are you" I asked " a werewolf" he said quietly.

I opend my mouth to roar at him but stoped." im sorry you have to see this but i cant let you run its time for me to hunt" he said." IM A VAMPIRE!" i yelled




THE END ill come out with more soon

Comments

[Everlastingangel09]

-continued.
and maybe how the warewolf transforms. But all in all, writing more gives off good practice, just like what MnM-cutie-pie- says

[Everlastingangel09]

I like the fact of where you are going in the story line, but as a writer who has published a few books, heres a great tip. Try outlining who your characters are and the basic scenario. This is a good start and can be polished. Add a bit more feel to this piece, you are never to young to publish, I published my first kid story book whien I was 6. But try and prolong who they are, it was a little bit to soon to reveal them. maybe adding what the reflection of the moons light does to the vampire

[Tomboys Polar]

I can see where you are going. You are getting there... slowly. I must say you have up and coming talent. PLEASE! Keep writing (in general) because you will get better and better! You'll get better at layering it out... through time. Good story line! 3 / 5