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I had forgotten how far I ran or where I was, all I knew I had to keep running to see tomorrow. Pouring, the rain it harder to see my next step into the fog filled night. I had hard right turn into an alley, I lost my footing and slipped. Laying on the cold wet ground I thought that this would be last sight of my life. The lights of the street were vanishing fireflies in my mind.
Suddenly it was all black, I couldn’t remember were I was. Then I saw my dad looking down at me with glare in his eyes. His glare was that of an raving lion ready to attack. Grabbing me by neck he thrust me against the wall.
“Do you understand what it means for your brother to become a worldwide track star? You always getting in the way, your aren’t helping your brother concentrate. Your were supposed be boy and our hope to having a great son, but you turned out to be a ugly, worthless girl!” Yelled father.
“What did I do wrong? I was only trying to help brother by being there to cheer him on during his competition. As his sister I need to support him. “ I replied back.
“Both our mother and I agree that you don’t need in this family to help him. Our just a nuisance, so either shut up a take it or you will continue till beat until you get that through that thick little brain of your’s!” Father exclaimed
He threw me down on the ground and left the room. As soon as he left the room, my brother approached me. He brushed my hair out of my face and then began to speak.
“Did father hit you. You aren't hurt to bad?” He asked.
I shook my head to let him know that I was okay. He helped my up and then led me to the stairs the went to the first level of the house. Stopping at the stairs, he motioned to me to come closer. He pushed me down the stairs without a suddenly look in his eyes.
Moments later I reached the first floor. Everything around me was spinning, was I going to die.
“Good, now are you hurt enough.” He stated.
Are they all crazy I thought, but I knew that I couldn’t stay in the house any longer. I slowly got up, I made a mad dash to the front door. I was outside, still running, then I saw brother behind me. I let out a scream and then it all vanished and I found myself in a huge room.
It was a nightmare, but that was an exactly replica of what had happened earlier. I looked around the enormous room, it was decorated with elegance. As my eye wondered the room, I heard footsteps approaching the door. All I keep thinking where the hell could I be? Also how did I get here?
- by Allie72393 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 05/16/2009 |
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- Title: Family Love
- Artist: Allie72393
- Description: This just a small bit of a story I'm writing on an idea i had. I write when I get bored so if not that good I understand so leave comments on what I should fix. Thanks. Sorry for the wierd spacing it 's for paragraghs.
- Date: 05/16/2009
- Tags: family love
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Comments (5 Comments)
- DragonaScorpio - 04/03/2010
- Um, I like the story, check some punctuation and some spelling and it'll be great!
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- Aelita Belpoise - 05/30/2009
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PARAGRAPH 9
line 1-was I going to die (question mark not a period)
PARAGRAPH 10
line 1-good, now are you hurt enough (question mark not a period)
PARAGRAPH 11
line 1-are THEY ALL crazy (you switched them)- but that was an EXACT (not exactly) replica
line 3-All I keep thinking IS where the hell could I be? (I'm so proud you used a question mark!!!!! ^_^)
lol I told you that I would do this to you. Did you think I was kidding? Well there you go ^_^ and I loved i - Report As Spam
- Aelita Belpoise - 05/30/2009
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PARAGRAPH 3
line 2-YOU (not your) aren't helping-you were supposed to be A boy
PARAGRAPH 5
line 1-both YOUR mother and I-you don't need TO BE in this-YOU'RE just a nuisance
line 2-shut up AND (not a) take it-you will continue TO BE beat
line 3-as soon as he left the room (the second room in repetative)
PARAGRAPH 7
Did father hit you. (question mark not a period)
PARAGRAPH 8
line 2-THAT (not the) led to the first level
line 3- I don't know what happened there XD - Report As Spam
- Aelita Belpoise - 05/30/2009
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PARAGRATH 1
line 1-all I knew IS THAT I had to keep running to see tomorrow.
line 2-the rain MADE it harder to see-I had hard right turn into an alley? What the hell's up with that? lol
line 3-comma between cold and wet-i thought that this would be THE last sight of my life
PARAGRAPH 2
line 2-with A glare in his eyes- A (not an) raving lion - Report As Spam