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under there....
it was under there.....
burning desires....
demonic intentions....
it yearned for blood....
it asked for pain.....
it cried for vengence...
so it hid....under there...
waiting for it's next victim....
waiting...for them...
normal kids...
they knew about it...and where it hid....
they knew not to go....
but they did anyway....
trecking into it's hideaway,
defieing it's cripts,
they strode...waiting for it to come....
a door...
singed slightly....
waited for them at the end....
but will they make it?
can they?
five of them....five traveled....
trying not to lose sight of their goal...
trying to make it out...
but many lost sight of there goal...
lost sight of the end...
leaving the creature to swallow them whole...
when he made it...he was alone...
he looked back hesitantly...
would he leave them behind to die...
"it was their choice
but you...you made it."
the prescence of his stared shot write through him like a bullet.
the creature backed away....
"they gave in to temptation.....
they lost sight of their goal"
the boy looked back at the door......
the sun was bright and beaming as he stared down the street.
buildings wrecked,trash cans lit.
old he was now,but never the less,he was happy.
even when he visited his old neighborhood friends,
and learned about their troubles.
"i'm sorry...i couldn't help......
- by ILikeBabyBarPoo |
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- | Submitted on 08/06/2009 |
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- Title: the creature
- Artist: ILikeBabyBarPoo
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Description:
the sun was bright and beaming as he stared down the street.
buildings wrecked,trash cans lit.
old he was now,but never the less,he was happy.
even when he visited his old neighborhood friends,
and learned about their troubles.
"i'm sorry...i couldn't help...... - Date: 08/06/2009
- Tags: creature
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Comments (1 Comments)
- Machiavellian_Prince - 08/06/2009
- I get it, it's like a metaphor thing. It's very nice, but it could use some better spelling in a few places. And the grammar seems kinda off at times. But otherwise good and pretty entertaining.
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