- They walked slowy through the dark misty forest. he leand back and sighed reluctantly " well rose you wanted to be alone and talk so talk." he said with a nervous tone. she stepped forward and spoke with an utter darkness to her tone "You wanted to know how to be like us...to be immortal". He nodded and looked towards the moon for a brief moment and turned back only to be caught in her gaze. for what he saw were not eyes of a demon but the forever pained eyes of a young girl trapped in a form of living hell. and just for that instant she seemed human, but then he felt a cold dark chill surrond him and she no longer seemed human. she walked closer and she pressed her cold bare hands against his chest. He pulled back, his heart racing, blood pumping, because for the first time with her, he felt fthe true meaning of fear. she leaned in closer looking into his pale blue eyes and spoke with a voice like wind, "One kiss...is all it takes." she then pressed her icy black lips to his. he felt a seldom surge of power and as their lips letf eachother his eyes went from pale blue to an ominous saphire. his body began to quiver and shake violently. she stepped back and told him "relax your mind or you will die a violent death". he did as so relaxed his mind causing his body to become still. he began to turn pale and arched his back. silvery-blue wings began spreading from his back...
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- Title: The Immortal Kiss
- Artist: demon-wolf-goddess_death
- Description: well for 3 days i thought about writing it then one nite i woke up late in the evening as always and decided to write it..well the first thing that came to my mind was amazing but i need a few second opinions help me out (it has been copywrited so if u steal i sue)
- Date: 06/19/2010
- Tags: immortal kiss krk387
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- Jericho39 - 07/09/2010
- When your writing is limited, don't use the same adjectives (dark), it doesn't appeal to people as much as it would in a long piece of literature.
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