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Who is that guy with the hood?I should find him and thanked him for saving me.I am very curious about this guy. This school is only for girls.There can't be boys.
“Ms Peterson!” Mrs Bibila called out my name.She's a French-language teacher. In this school,we can pick whether we want to learn foreign language like French,Japanese,Spanish or Italian.”Are you day-dreaming?Stand up Ms. Peterson.” I stood up. “You should pay attention.This subject is going to be in your exam.Go and wash your face.”,she spoked with her soft voice. I nodded. Mrs Bibila is a kind and understanding teacher. I liked her and I can't believe I slept in her class. Suddenly, I bumped in to someone. “Oh,i'm sorry.I didn't see you” and I bowed like some Japanese geisha. “It's ok. Don't bow like that” and the voice giggled. I was shocked because this voice is not just a voice.It's a boy's.I looked up and saw a fine looking guy wearing a school uniform. The badge says ' Lincoln Private Boys' School' . He also apologised to me for not looking where he is going and he continued walking.He turned back and smiled at me. I blushed.He giggled again.I quickly walked to the washroom.Later, I found out from Hana that the Lincoln Private Boys' School are here in St. Angelique Academy for a visit like a delegation.
I talked about the incident to my dorm-mates. “Really?!How does he looked like?Is he hot?Does he have a deep voice?”, Rina asked excitely.And I thought that Rina is tomboy.I shook my head,it was rather silly. “Well,he has a white skin like mine.He's tall and has a fit body.He has green-emerald eyes and his black hair covers his right eye”. All my dorm-mates squealed. I bet the guy's are their type.”So,what's his name?”, Rina asked again.”I don't know” I said as I took my novel entitled 'A Little Girl's Dream'.I liked the novel a lot.I even brought it to school and read it while Mrs. Gills is babbling.
The next day, me and some other members of the Peer Advisor Club were scheduled to gather at the hall. I wondered why. I'm a new member of the club and usually new members are not that needed for social activities.Suddenly the hall's door opened and came in Mr. Rockwell, the clubs' teacher advisor and group of handsome boys. “Good days, my dearest. As you all know the Lincoln's Private Boys' School are here for a visit and I want you to spend some time with them. Each of one of you will get one student. I've organised your names and the boys' so you can look here.”,he said and gave the paper to one of the members.I looked at the list. I was partnered with Raymond Vellington. Then, somebody pat my shoulder.I turned and was a bit shocked. “You're the girl that I bumped yesterday.”,he said and he smiled. This guy who I bumped is Raymond Vellington? “Sooo hot”, I said that without noticing I did say that. “Excuse me?”,he asked and tried to hold his laugh. “Err..nothing...!”,I said that quickly and shut my mouth.We were quiet then.And I asked spontaniously “Where do you want to go?” “How about you show me around your school.This place looked interesting” So I walked with him around the school.I showed him many interesting places such as the swimming pool, the outdoor cafeteria, the arcade and so on. We sat on a bench under a shady frangipani tree. Flowers are falling down. We ate strawberry ice-cream with marshmallows together. “Do you like this school?” he suddenly asked,breaking the silence. I looked at him. “A little.The only things that I hate is the seniors” and I continue licking my ice-cream. “Same,they always make me feel like I 'm going to kill them”. We laughed.We shared stories together and telling jokes. Then I got the feeling he's staring at me. My heart is beating fast. What is this feeling? “Hey Erica..”,he called me. “ You know, two days ago,I went to this school before the sports day. I saw a girl lying at the filed under the hot sun. I bet she's tired because of the training so I brought her to this school's clinic. She's so pretty,you know. I think I fell in love with the mysterious girl.I wonder who is she...” I was shocked to hear his story. That girl was me and the guy who saved me is you? Now my question has been answered. Raymond was my hero. We continued our journey around St. Angelique. He hold my hand. My face is so red and everyone's watching us. “Err... Raymond.We shouldn't be holding hands”. “Why?What if I get lost?This school is huge you know.” and he giggled. I didn't say a word. My heart is beating up fast.What was this feeling?It feels warm...
- by Moonlight Crystals |
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- | Submitted on 11/01/2010 |
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- Title: This is Erica's Story 4 part 1
- Artist: Moonlight Crystals
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this is the part one of chapter four.
i wanted to continue but i don't want it to be too long.
so please enjoy reading it,it took me hours and days to think of ideas.
'coz i'm no good at romance stuff. - Date: 11/01/2010
- Tags: story erica chap
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Berries and Kisses - 11/25/2011
- Otherwise, it is okay*
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- Berries and Kisses - 11/25/2011
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The story-line is okay.
You need more details, and better grammar, as well as you need to improve you're typing
You're story seems a bit cliche, but you can still spruce it up with juicy detail words and adjectives-- but don't over do it.
The thing that annoyed me the most is the way you type, and one thing in particular:
After you place a mark of punctuation, press [space] before starting you're next word.
You should re-read your rough drafts more carefully before publishing.
Otherwise, it - Report As Spam
- HappyLime_x3 - 11/15/2010
- Maybe that warm feeling is love! I dunno. Rate back?
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- Shaky jakeward - 11/01/2010
- its good !
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