B.D. BEFORE DEATH

• Artist: xxbabiibrooklynxx
• Description: this is jus a little story about a girl running away from the problems of a self-induced hell. This is everything that happens to herbefore she dies. I hope u like it. I wrote it when i was a little depressed. Its basically how i felt.
• Date: 07/19/2008
• Tags: poetry

She was cold. She sat there shivering, holding her heart in her hands. She couldnt figure out why this was happening to her. Her life was spiraling out of control. The screaming voices got louder and louder crying out fOr help. She wanted to fight but it was too hard. She begins to cry. She’s hiding the dark all alone, losing her ground. She holds her hands to her face with her fingers burning through. She peaks out watching the black sun rise as the walls came closer. She screams longing to be free. She jumps into her mind trying to remember her forgotten soul’s name to cry for help. She’s begging to live her life up in the skies. She falls to the floor, her pupils grow wide, she says, “why me” as she looks up and watches her last breath walk away from her.

Comments

[coreycloud]

yea it isnt in the poetry side of work but a great peice of work a give a 5

[manalian]

mysterious
quite a good work

[Zajas]

It's almost poetry, it's like a free verse, but more in the manner of writing a story, it has flow and ebb, and isn't particularly regular, but I like it. 4/5.

[w1nter_w1ngs]

You can literally imagine this happening to u in real life. Awesome work, love it.

[Syazwani224]

cool

[reapersuns manfriend]

This isn't a poem. It's more of a shortest-short story. It's pleasent, but I wouldn't recommend calling it poetry. I refuse to vote on this piece because it should go somewhere else. Please delete it or ask a mod to delete it for you.

[NefariousShark]

i could careless about where this poem is placed. anyhow urpoem is very interesting. the setting was a bit foggy but i could imagine where u where and why . 4/5 ^^