B.D. BEFORE DEATH

• Artist: xxbabiibrooklynxx
• Description: this is jus a little story about a girl running away from the problems of a self-induced hell. This is everything that happens to herbefore she dies. I hope u like it. I wrote it when i was a little depressed. Its basically how i felt.
• Date: 07/19/2008
• Tags: poetry

She was cold. She sat there shivering, holding her heart in her hands. She couldnt figure out why this was happening to her. Her life was spiraling out of control. The screaming voices got louder and louder crying out fOr help. She wanted to fight but it was too hard. She begins to cry. She’s hiding the dark all alone, losing her ground. She holds her hands to her face with her fingers burning through. She peaks out watching the black sun rise as the walls came closer. She screams longing to be free. She jumps into her mind trying to remember her forgotten soul’s name to cry for help. She’s begging to live her life up in the skies. She falls to the floor, her pupils grow wide, she says, “why me” as she looks up and watches her last breath walk away from her.

Comments

[Mr Botty]

This definetly isn't poetry. You might need to put this somewhere else in the writing arena. You'll get more critism, and better ratings for sure...