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Theres many a time that I have wished
that Im really as perfect as you say.
But, the reality of it is that
There's a perment illiusion in the way.
Love blinds your sight
and intertwines your soul to my light.
You are incapable to see
the one standing in front of you, the real me.
Im a creature that lies
that cries.
That screams
that dreams.
Horrible horrible things.
Why do you love this...
Why full of such a beautiful bliss?
I dont
wont
ever begin to understand.
But as long as you think
that every time you blink.
You see the true love
that you love.
Then I will see...
The real me...
- by M0shing Cigarettes |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/15/2008 |
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- Title: The real me
- Artist: M0shing Cigarettes
- Description: I wrote this out of anger. Its not so good but Its how I felt.
- Date: 07/15/2008
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Comments (5 Comments)
- violet kushina - 09/02/2009
- feeling is a gift.. writing down how u truly feel is a beauty of it..^^
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- XxRaven KnightxX - 12/13/2008
- it was deep...you should take it, and see what it sounds like in like, the 1500's style...replace "you" with "thee" lol, im sorry, it might be good though? the original is awesome!
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- MrAudacity - 12/13/2008
- The words are so..... meaningfull o_O
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- Toastbusters - 07/15/2008
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That colour is the most antagonizing shade of a*****e blue - ouch.
At least it's not detriment to any work of art though. Your piece is generic, unpolished, and just another whinefest to throw on the heap.
There's just no effort - it's a raving piece, the only moment's focus on the tentative rhyme scheme (and maybe a frantic meter?). It's just so slapdash... Serious pass. - Report As Spam
- Winry_Rockbell799 - 07/15/2008
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nice poem. i really liked the lines: "Love blinds your sight
and intertwines your soul to my light." It flowed well together and i liked it ^_^ - Report As Spam