Dusk

• Artist: La Cerise Noire
• Description: Inspired by my window....i was looking out and i noticed the clouds going around. and i spent the day watching the clouds till night.
• Date: 07/21/2008
• Tags: dusk

The clouds are rolling by in shades,
The wind is swirling, as biting blades.

Sun is setting, and warmth soon gone,
And before you know it, the day is done.

Watch as the clouds blow past,
None can ever be the last.

Now, the sun had sunken low,
And the moon rises, with her eerie glow.

Comments

[writervsworld]

ya, it's cool, very desriptive in so few lines. hehe could use work, but uh den don check mine out, i'll sound hypocritey

[Musical Beanbags]

It has a very..... (can't describe it >< wink feeling to it. It deserves a 5/5 from every person who can really say they understand poetry.

[ThA AzN DeViL]

The clouds being gone have nothing to do with dusk fyi lol, i like it, but it doesnt stand out. 4/5

[xeroabyss]

Wow, this feels more like the ominous coming of winter more than it does the night, the way you describe it.
But still a nice write.