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Her eyes, like an ocean
an ocean fierce and so many unexplored depths
the words of life roll from her tongue like the ocean waves crash to the beach
her words ware you down like the pale sand
her eyes widen in fear and remorse
and close in a blink of beauty
when her eyes open, like the first flower of spring
her ocean of sadness is gone
leaving a scarlet blue ocean to surround her
one lasyt glance to her past
and she closes the scarlet blue eyes for the last time
- by demon strait outta_hell |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/31/2008 |
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- Title: Scarlet blue eyes
- Artist: demon strait outta_hell
- Description: This is just a poem i wrote this yesterday around eleven. and i don't know if its any good, but my friend said i should up load it. So here it is.
- Date: 07/31/2008
- Tags: scarleteyes
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Gravetye - 02/14/2009
- This isn't bad. I like the ocean metaphor, but the random flower reference in the middle of the piece kind of threw me off. I think when you're concentrating on a single theme you should try to stick to it instead of mixing metaphors. But other than that, it was pretty good. 4/5
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- PsychG - 01/26/2009
- Thanks so much for commenting on Siren 3. I truly liked this. I just noticed a few typos, overall, amazing work
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- XxxBananasxxX - 12/23/2008
- beautiful
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- lil-wind-ninja - 07/31/2008
- i like it its cute
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- DahvieVanityBoi - 07/31/2008
- Wow, this is pretty good. Nice job, you have some serious talent. This clearly expresses emotion. I love it. ^_^
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