Whispers

• Artist: Jenn_Lynn94
• Description: This is a poem I wrote about a year ago. Its about a girl's love that is rejected and ends with death. This is not about myself, nor about anyone i know. I wrote this only from feeling. Just so everyone knows im not suicidal.
• Date: 08/12/2008
• Tags: love lostlove rejection death

I love you, she whispers,
as he acts like he didn't hear.
I love you, she whispers,
but he doesn't seem to care.
I love you, she whispers, once more as her heart pounds faster.
I love you, he whispers, but. . not to her, to another.
I love you she whispers, as she slits her wrists.
Her blood falls, tears shed.
I love you he whispers
but he took to long. . .
until she was dead.

Comments

[X_Midnight_Wind_X]

i think it's great your freestyle is wonderful and it flows along smoothly
5/5

[iRetaliate]

it's not that good, if it's a rhyming poem, than you're illiterate, if it's a freestyle poem, it has horrible rythm...