pain

• Artist: rocksan11
• Description: i wote this when i was in a very sad and i was in a depressed mode but now i am better and ya enjoy
• Date: 09/21/2008
• Tags: pain

pain is when you cry
pain is when you ach
but the pain i feel in side is differnt
this pain is an empty pain
like nothing before
what would life be without pain
pain from a broken leg or pain from a shadered heart
if there was no pain there would be know life
pain lets us feel
pain lets us know we are alive
with out pain we would all die
with out pain we would be like zombies cant feel the bitter cold
cant feel the spray of the see
nor a hug from our beloved loved ones
pain is bad nor good its not up to me to choose
you choose your own
its always your pain not mine

Comments

[Prince Vlad Tempes III]

I like this one cuz I understand pain and I can relate to what you'r saying.

[rocksan11]

thank you people who commented

[Jeremy-pdf]

i think it's beautiful.very nicely written.it made me REAlLY think about pain...thank you for writing this : )

[Qwad]

I think this is okay, not due to your typing ability just because of the different idea's in the poem kind of contradicted each other and some points in the poem were off topic. I think you should have a re-think of it, do a mind map. State what points you wish the poem to make, what idea you want to give to the reader. Make it clear unless you want that sense of mystery about the poem, which I suggest not to do as it is complicated and can be pulled off well by advanced poets only.