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"Why bother poking this pencil to my brain, wondering what is and isn't to write." He said. "To have inspiration and the will to fly, but to have only one candle to hold in this dark maze. To come out with a sword, be praised by my people as i tell them an answer."
He says, "When you feel you do not have much to say, rejoice for your mind is filled with knowledge and is ready to grow.
I have nothing to say, only sharing and understanding. Give what you are given and there will be balance."
The people looked confused at an answer so simple, could he possibly be serious?
He then said, "There is only the future and the past, I am not an existentialist."
He said, "There will be a time in your life where your individual perception will gather knowledge, truths you did not ask for, but given by the one above. And you will flee to a dark maze. You will have the choice to face your fears or live with them."
- by Domenic Nerini |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/13/2008 |
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- Title: Answer
- Artist: Domenic Nerini
- Description: During a time i had so much inspiration, but didn't know what to write. So I wrote about just that!
- Date: 10/13/2008
- Tags: answer
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Stayce94 - 06/28/2010
- Holy cow...this is the work of a genius. FAVE!!!
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- OceanBreathesSalty - 10/13/2008
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"confused at an answer so simple" does not make sense, his answers and statements were cryptic, nonsensical, abstract, and with little actual meaning behind them.
That's all I have that hasn't already been said.
Still, i enjoyed reading this, it was interestingly done. - Report As Spam
- Nicholas Kaze - 10/13/2008
- Needs basic editing, but the imagery is good and the ideas you express are intruiging. May I suggest taking out the line that reads '...I am not an existentialist'? Apart from the fact that that's a run-on sentence, existentialism really has nothing to do with your poem. In fact, it didn't even cross my mind until you pointed it out.
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- neodapanther - 10/13/2008
- I see what you changed, and it flows a lot better. Still not perfect, but much better. Kudos.
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- Domenic Nerini - 10/13/2008
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Yes i saw that, and did not know whether to change it or not, he he.
Maybe i was thinking of it as more of a prologue then.
I'll find the best way to fix it, thanks. smile - Report As Spam
- neodapanther - 10/13/2008
- I like it, except the first bit is a little confusing and doesn't relate to the rest very well. You took it from you ("my" wink to "He." So yes, there's a better way to introduce the idea, but a good idea it is.
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