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when i look into the sun i see the light
when i look into the sky at night i see the stars
but when i look around this room i see nothing but white walls
an empty feeling
i cant explane inside
my heart beat slows
as the room gets blury
i hope to god i can hold on just one minuet longer
my head hurts my vison blury
with one last breath i say good bye
but its not over
i am still here
just not aware
i feel a cold chill in the air
it stings at my cheeks
but i wish i could be out of here
some where eles where i could be happy
but not ready to go
i fight the feeling of leaveing this place
i must hold on and stay longer
for if i go my last thing to say would be
i didn't want to leave
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- Title: all i ever wanted
- Artist: rocksan11
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- Date: 10/19/2008
- Tags: ever wanted
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Comments (5 Comments)
- rocksan11 - 10/19/2008
- thanks for the nice comments please dont go by grammar because if yiou do i will get rated wrong thanks for your comments and ratings
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- Chayce West - 10/19/2008
- bearable to read i suppose. Not good, but not bad.
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- iBrightScales - 10/19/2008
- Too many spelling errors. I couldn't bring myself to finish the poem because of them. Also, it was a little cliche'. Better than some, however. 3/5.
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- xXxMusicToMyEarsxXx - 10/19/2008
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wow this is really good
im impressed
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- Prince Vlad Tempes III - 10/19/2008
- Wow!
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