She Remembered....

• Artist: vampire_lover12
• Description: This was an assignment for my English-2 PAP class. We were working on our Tone packet. (Various excercises.) We read a paragraph similar to mine and we were assigned to create a paragraph like that one, using a tone word from the list. I didn't have a chance to read it in class, but oh well. ^_^ And yes, the "She remembered" is how the paragraph was written. I'm sorry if you don't like it, but this is the way she askd us to write it.
• Date: 11/30/2008
• Tags: remembered

She remembered her wings.
Her beautiful, pure white wings would shine so bright.
She remembered the sensation she felt when her wings spread across the vast sky,
And the way her heart felt lifted when she took flight.
She remembered the day she fell.
Her bodied felt heavy as she was hurtling towards the Earth.
She remembered watching her feathers around her fall off her wings.
A scream left her lips, but no one would hear.
Her tears were falling, but no one would see.
Wrapping her arms around herself, to keep herself together.
The last thing she remembered was a pain on her back, and a bright light.
She could no longer feel her wings.
She had no hope, no time, and no wings.

Comments

[ashsnowgirl11]

This poem is beautifully written and i don't know anyone wouldn't like it. Unless they don't understand eloquence and complexity of certain writing styles.

[Vincent_Iscariot_Key]

Well, it is very interesting passage that you had to write it, since if people can see themselves as that, and how frail our lives really are, they would be amazed how vulnerable we really are to when it comes to all things like that.