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So I came to a place where the light does shine
A beautiful place where everything rhymes
Where angels and saints worship God with his awesome power
The place does not go by any hour.
The next place I went to was nothing but fire
But that place had hope in the mire
Angels lifted those poor souls from the heat
And I saw many people down there, even Pete.
The final place I saw was nothing but tormenting dogs
You had that Satan looking down as a darkened smog
The place had no hope of escape or hope
And there was definitely not a single bar of soap.
What do you think? wink
- Title: Heaven, Purgatory, and Hell
- Artist: byzdude17
- Description: Good poem!
- Date: 12/01/2008
- Tags: heaven purgatory hell
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Comments (4 Comments)
- bushy_haired_freak - 12/04/2008
- Err.. it might have been better if you hadn't added the last lines to both the second and third stanza.
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- byzdude17 - 12/02/2008
- Actually that is Shakespearean English!
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- Dreaming_Jack - 12/02/2008
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Ok ..... -w-; sorry , I'm judging , but you left quite a smudging.
A few things you spelled wrong , you need to make it sound like a song!
( Serious ... power , and poor are spelled wrong , and I know my word are quite strong ) - Report As Spam