kill me romanticly

• Artist: TheguiltyCancer
• Description: midnight creeper plz comment let me know if this is emo enough.
• Date: 12/04/2008
• Tags: romance

tell me if u love me..... how do i know if ur gonna catch me when i fall? do even know what love is? will u fill my soul with vomit? now if u ever left me i would send u to hell..... cause that means ur doubting me and u see another girl and i hope if u chase for her when ur done with me that she breaks ur heart into a million pieces and doesnt evem catch u and lets u fall evrey....time and i hope ur happy if u leave me and say i left u because u were bringing me down i would just look u in the eyes and say ur not there and ur invisble in my eyes and i wouldnt care if u cried when i said that cause u did the same to me and mabye one day i will meet the love to catch me..... ~for ppl waiting to be catched~

Comments

[PenguinColada]

I can't get past the webspeak, such as "ur", "ppl", etc. I would also capitalize words as well.

[dragon h123]

a tad dark dont you think but it does speak the soul as poetry is intended 4/5

[r e v i v e - d e a t h]

Um... I have a few little comments...
1) Poems are written in stanzas
2) When writing poetry you should spell out all the words. 'Ur' does not cut it.
3) Spelling and grammar. Poetry is just as big of literature as novels are, they take time and a lot of thought to write.

Other than that, I found it quiet nice. It shows a side of a girl that is just watching her love fly away to another.

[TheguiltyCancer]

plz dont report this im just finding my love....one day