Mask

• Artist: xX_Zara_Xx
• Description: Wearing the smiling mask...
• Date: 12/14/2008
• Tags: mask

She can only cry in her sleep.

Hiding everything,
Keeping it all inside,
Unable to form it in to words;

She can only mumble them.

Her eyes are dry,
But the look she gives,
Only hurts others' hearts;

I look away,
I can't bear to look at her,
It hurts too much to admit;

She is my reflection in the mirror.

Wearing the smiling mask,
Acting like the stupid one,
The one with no problems;

Always accused of lying of her problems.

I'm so sorry,
That I won't tell what's tearing me up,
I don't want to tell;

It hurts too much to see others worry.

I'm okay,
I'm not hurting,
My life is great;

All of these are lies that you hear.

Comments

[BiggieSmall123]

Hey, Hey.
I'm pretty good at listening to people's problem.
If this was about you, you know who to holleerrr!

;P

This was truly direct and honest. It was like a Confession more than anything in my opinion. People go through similar phase at one point in their life.

[Starry Starry Fright]

I like the way your poem is laid out, you've made some interesting stylistic choices and they'vepaid off or you. Well done.There are lines here and there that could use stronger wording, but overall it conveys a very raw emotion.

[abcsaremyfriends]

This reminds me of something I wrote a few years ago. Nicely done.

[Coloratura]

very true for some people. Like a hollow shell. 5/5

[Dark Serraphim]

It would be a much more powerful poem if you didn't state what you've already gotten across again. Your readers are smarter than you think we are. We got it the first time. We understood you. You don't have to tell it to us again. *wink*

[Dark Serraphim]

It is sad, but I feel like you make statements that you don't have to. "all of these are lies that you hear," "she is my reflection in the mirror," for example. Those are phrases where you could probably word them differently so you're being repetitive. You can make the last line something else. Your last three lined stanza really says what the last line just repeats.

[weezieishness]

That's sad, but a nice poem.