Invisible

• Artist: Ukioma
• Description: This is my first attempt. Peotry isn't usually my thing since my rhymes suck, but this one refused to leave me alone until I wrote it. Constructive criticism appreciated. Useless insults... not so much.
• Date: 12/24/2008
• Tags: invisible

Fading into the walls
into the blue-grey tiles
My footsteps echoing into the empty halls
The sound of sad smiles
drifting through the air
in a black fog.
Walking to the beat
of the waves on the shore
My rosethorn webs of silence,
calling for more.
What's this, you ask
laughing uneasily.
This, my dears, is my kingdom of yore.

Comments

[x blossoming-innocence x]

wow that was good! I liked your diction in this poem. ^^

[ii_phatboy]

It is very good for a first attempt. dont give up on writing what your heart desires. for a little of inspiration look at all things in different ways like the moon and the stars.

[silver nymph]

For a first attempt, it's pretty good.