Space

• Artist: Miyuki_2220
• Description: OK, another depressing one. I'll see if I can change that. But don't rush meh. It WILL takw time.
  
  This is one I wrote before bed. . . Also another first draft, criticism invited and title soooo not final.
  
  Sorry for any bad spelling, too.
• Date: 12/27/2008
• Tags: space depressing

My heart,
A helpless space.
Intoxicated by silence.
A choking panic.
A widespread sight.
My blank planet,
For my counter piece of mind.
An echoing thought.
Not full, nevr filled.
Not empty, never will.
Blank.
Nothing there.
Nevr was.
Right,
Nothing to fill the space,
Never was, could never be.
You can't fill a nonexistent space

Comments

[ShinoDemon]

eh, it's ok if it's depresing i make alot of poems that are like that...5/5<3 i love your poems

[bindyblueeyes]

it started out amazing but near the end you started losing it

i don't know if that will make sense to you but i'll give you a 4/5

[QueenOfKeepers]

i wouldn't go as far as to say 5/5. maybe 4/5. it still needs some work. maybe a few more lines. some way to paint a picture in your mind.

[Divine Angel Starr]

Simply amazing 5/5