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Adam, fruit of all creation,
Eve, wine of God’s love,
Combined, create the one,
The eternal loving seed of life,
Male, strong tree of the earth,
Female, beauteous flower of serenity,
Each interlocking with each other,
Making the whole of dream and reality,
Love, the free bird without boundaries,
Fear, the dream that prevents reality,
One can silently construct all,
As well can they prevent the other,
Law, the utopia we long for in unrest,
Chaos, the uncontrollable love of youth,
The sincere and true faces of all,
Yet, the masks of anonymous and unidentified,
Victory, the trial overcome by many,
Defeat, the road yet more are thrown onto,
Motivations driving us down a winding path,
E’en when the way is entirely shattered,
Adam, fruit of all creation,
Eve, wine of God’s love,
Combined immortalize one being,
One who defies all boundaries,
When only we subtly realize
We stood firm and united,
And balance kept us from anything,
Yet so, it granted everything,
- by silentsaint1 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/30/2008 |
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- Title: Adam & Eve
- Artist: silentsaint1
- Description: A poem I just made in one sitting about the world and its balance. Enjoy and comment please.
- Date: 12/30/2008
- Tags: poem balance
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Kibroth - 01/19/2009
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I'm suprised and gladdened to see so many here that consider, if not respect, views similar to my own.
Interesting formation and rythm. I would suggest being more tactical with your usage of commas.
Still, I haven't read many poems of that length that hold together as well as yours. 5/5
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- NakedJack - 12/31/2008
- I'm going to give it 5 stars just because it has to be compared to something (what is 1 and what is 5?) and the other poems on gaia mostly blow. The wording of the poems is good but it still lacks an impact. Even though a direction or point to the poem is clearly stated, doesn't seem to flow to a singularity. Plus your perceptions of balance, nature, competition and strength are disagreeable to me at best. Spiral out.
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- Summer Fallwinterspring - 12/30/2008
- Interesting. Four stars, shall we say?
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