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You make it easy to fall
When you tore down these walls
I was falling very quickly
You caught me quicker than I fell
So does it feel like I'm still falling
You said you would catch me when I fell
So where are you now
You sent someone else to catch me
Yet, when they arrived instead of catching me they let me fall to the ground
- by Vampire_of_Dark_Daughters |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/01/2009 |
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- Title: Falling
- Artist: Vampire_of_Dark_Daughters
- Description: plz coment
- Date: 01/01/2009
- Tags: falling
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Comments (6 Comments)
- emmywinner56 - 06/19/2009
- i think that repeating the words kind of enforces the meaning. You could use different words-but the replacements might not always have the right meaning. While there are many meanings for falling and catching,they always mean the right thing in this poem. I wouldn't change it.But thats my opinion.
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- purple_licious1993 - 03/09/2009
- ok I don't agree with sweet little mouse, ok yeah it repeats, but girl its good I love it. I know how that feels .
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- sweet little mouse - 01/04/2009
- I like the subject and I wish I could see this progress a little more... but it sort of feels like you were a bit stuck and didn't know where to go with it, and instead are just repeating yourself and using the same words many times. Catching, falling, fell, caught, fall...... that's really all I am seeing here. :/
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- Vampire_of_Dark_Daughters - 01/03/2009
- yea i wuz in a rush
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- Capricious-Cervidae - 01/02/2009
- Oh I forgot >....>o just a FYI for next time, The Description box is for your coments about the poem the other box is for the poem ^-^
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- Capricious-Cervidae - 01/02/2009
- Know how they feel lolz.
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