The Web

• Artist: parapleut
• Description: if you have heard of the elemental theory - how everything is composed of Fire, Water, Air or Earth, and something can be defeated by the elements it's not made out of. For example, a bird is of air, water and earth, so it can only be defeated by those of fire - this will make sense. This is my first submission, so I want REALLY honest critique, no matter how hurtful. Thank you! :)
• Date: 01/05/2009
• Tags: theweb elements firstsubmission parapleut

There you spin, my elusive friend
Working, dancing, singing with no end
Why cannot my life spin itself in such a fashion
Bent over my craft, never giving up, always with instinctive passion

There you spin, my enigmatic friend
Playing, laughing, crying with no end
How is it that my life can’t spin itself in such a fashion
Gliding through the patterns, brushing dreams, always with instinctive passion

There you spin, my enraged friend
Cursing, flushing, fighting with no end
What is it about my life that can’t spin itself in such a fashion
Tearing apart, then repairing, all evil one sees, always with instinctive passion

Here you spin, my enthralling friend
Hoping, planning, loving with no end
Who chose that my life could never spin itself in such a fashion
Building the foundations, warming our walls, always with true instinctive passion

Comments

[notsoheadless]

i like this

[EmoBananasStoleMyHomework]

i 100% agree with "Starry Night3800"... i dont get it, and how the HELL is "the elemental theory" related to this?!

[motherdear]

r u sure ur not already a published writer naw just playin but seriously that poem was beautiful

[Euphraini]

to tell you the truth... i don't understand. Eventhough you explained it, i still don't get it. And, also I don't understand how the 4 elements is related to 'the web'.... maybe it's just me because i'm stupid? but plz explain it to me.