Red Roses

• Artist: KissMeShawol
• Description: I made this poem a while bk when I was totally into everything has to rhyme! Lol, anyways, I wanted to post it up here so ppl could c how I did when I was only 8 or 9
• Date: 01/23/2009
• Tags: roses

Many a night slumber in peace,
Never to know their heart is missing a piece,
Whilst thoust pain hast increased.

Of heart break and red tears,
Of blood and never clears,
From thousts heart-broken dears.

From the darkest depths of thy soul,
For there, my demon is out of control,
And will stay there, forever more.

Forever now shalt this tear be in my heart,
Forever, torn apart,
Forever more, shall we be part.

Red roses hast sent thee,
And now hast to hear my plea,
And shalt never agree.

But from the plains of misery,
She hast used her bewitchery,
And thoust has used bribery.

You shalt make a great pair,
She of evil and thoust of despair,
Nevermore, can my heart be in repair.

Red roses.........

Comments

[NakedJack]

I thought this was going to be good, but bathos I say and nothing more.

[KissMeShawol]

Well, I was only 8 or 9 and now i'm almost 14, so I did see and modify quite a few mishaps in my other poems but not this one. Good eye though! ^-^

[a354]

It's impressive, though the "thoust"'s make it very difficult to read, I think it should be "thou" or "thine" in a couple of places there.