Ordinary Day

• Artist: 290DarkStars
• Description:
  i wrote this in his peace... so please enjoy! and God Bless! :mrgreen:
  
• Date: 02/04/2009
• Tags: ordinary

Its overcast outside,
the sky is wrapped in a warm quilt.
Its yet warm and rainy,
and humid just a tilt.

Plants come to life,
so do I inside.
I forget about my problems,
and all the times I lied.

I'm outside now,
with hair sopping wet.
I pray a little prayer,
and with god, I know, my life is set.

This peace, this joy,
it flows within me and out.
Dry inside, I sit at the window,
Jesus is alive no doubt.

Comments

[Daddy Got This Account]

aaww..... thats a sweet poem. ^^ you are such a good poet. 5/5

[-x- Fridge -x-]

Well, even though I'm a hardcore agnostic, it's still a pretty good poem.
The only thing that bothers me slightly is how every now and then you have an odd long line. Like with the "and with god, I know, my life is set" line or "the sky is wrapped in a warm quilt." They just seem awkward to me. It's good though

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

I agree with all the people below me, even without Christian beliefs, it is a well-typed poem.

[xXDark_Vampire_LoverXx]

I may not be Christian, but all of your poems are wonderful!

[xXHARMONIC blADE Xx]

i love it. it is touching

[Zurah]

Awh... So sweet.

I'm not Christian, but it's a great poem anyways, and that's saying something. I hope the rest of your congregation appreciates it, too.