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Thats strange, the red rose is stagnant
It looks haggard
The instinct of everyone and everything is to try to run away
Cuz if the rose is stagnant then there shall be devastation
The red rose begins to look ashen
The humdrum way of life is gone now
Now the utopia that we have inhabited is gone
The rose isn't red anymore it is black
As black as the midnight sky
Now we must find a way to live.
- by iFruitiePanda |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/07/2009 |
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- Title: The Red Rose
- Artist: iFruitiePanda
- Description: eh heh heh heh
- Date: 02/07/2009
- Tags: rose
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Comments (5 Comments)
- grjhaiobnajhrnqwog - 04/19/2009
- Poems are often better if you don't repeat words. Otherwise, it's decent. Good luck with the writing!
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- Ess Tee Eff Yuu - 02/07/2009
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Good word choice. ;D
The one thing I would work on is organization.
The flow of it is kind of interrupted.
Other than that, it was pretty good.
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- iFruitiePanda - 02/07/2009
- heh heh i know about the punctuation and thanks for your help biggrin
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- Tenacious Thomas - 02/07/2009
- It's good. just put in the puncuation. Tip: whenever i think of a poem i think of a rythm to a song
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- iFruitiePanda - 02/07/2009
- plz comment and help me with my poems... tell me what i need to work on and everything
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