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Life is cruel , life hurts
Life is cactus covered with thorns.
Life is a waste, life is a lie.
Life is a demon with two great big horns.
Life hates me, life chafes me
Life is nothing but pain.
Life is dark, life is mean.
Life is a perpetual rain.
Life is rough, life is scorn.
Life is a reason not to be born.
Life is falling, life is ending.
Life is throwing me away.
- by Paper Crane Kiko |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/13/2009 |
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- Title: life is.....
- Artist: Paper Crane Kiko
- Description: i was going through melancholia when i wrote this...... i hated my life and life itself.... please comment and let me know if theres anything that i should fix...
- Date: 02/13/2009
- Tags: life
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Paper Crane Kiko - 01/02/2010
- well the melancholia gave me inspiration so i rolled with it i came up with that^^^^^^ lolz
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- Eco-Ninja - 12/30/2009
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Ah but life is to exist!
And to exist one must first live,
live it to the fullest.
Life's not all bad,
life can be kind,
you simply have to believe it is,
Entering a happier state of mind.
life's what you make it,
This i swear true,
Because life is shifting,
like the ocean blue. - Report As Spam
- Paper Crane Kiko - 03/17/2009
- thank you very much...... ill take thaat into consideration 290DarkStars..... thank you for commenting.
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- crazy_maniac_chick94 - 02/21/2009
- this is overall a very good poem. kudos to you. i think if i were you, i would add another 2 or 3 syllables in the line that says life is nothing but pain, just to make the poem flow a bit better. other than that, i really like it and i think you have a talent! smile 4/5
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- 290DarkStars - 02/20/2009
- Im sorry for practicly insulting you in my previous comment, please comment on my crappy poetry. Im not trying to highly judge you as much as I am trying to humbly advise you, anyway.. sorry and all.
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- 290DarkStars - 02/20/2009
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I like what you have done, but there is no conclusion much less a redemption, and that threw me off. Anyway, I think that you could have reedemed my love for this poem if you
1) rhymed
2) put a little more of a story into it rather than ranting randomly (its only slightly random)
& 3) if you had hope draw close in the ending.
poetry is passion, heart, and rythem.
you followed the heart and rythem part well, but if this kind of thing is your passion, then I question your objectives. - Report As Spam
- Fairy Luna Nocturna - 02/20/2009
- Nicely well written. It conveys the way you were feeling at the time very well.
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