In the Streams of Consciousnes

• Artist: Broken_Guardian-Auron-
• Description: Name was cut off by one letter so don't think I missed one lol. Alright, so here is another of my poems, which I wrote before school in my little notepad. I don't like it that much, but I thought I would give it a shot, tell me what you people think.
• Date: 02/25/2009
• Tags: streams conciousness guilt

As true love will tell,
what else cannot fail,
for all I see is a blur,
the image in my mind is all wrong,
the gruesome sorrow-so strong,
taking over,
throwing my mind over,
mixing my mind at random,
setting my feelings with it's freedom,
breaking the promise-
breaking her heart,
I scream,
I shout,
say-
pay-
at loving bay,
the streams of dark waters,
careless of what matters,
my thoughts,
my memories-
drifting away,
the price I have to pay,
as a ray-
piercing my head,
my mind drops blank and dead,
seeing only light-
away goes the fright,
the dark clouds depart and goes-
as the water flows,
clean and filled with pureness,
in the streams of consciousness.

Comments

[Xx-true_tsubasa-xX]

I really like ur poem biggrin its very interesting, full of raw emotion. I find that the best peoms are the ones that we write when we are inspired all of a sudden. Also I like the format. razz