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A cloud blindfolds the sun,
its pregnant core black
and rotting with rain. Trees, skeleton hands,
reach up vainly to touch its imminence -
or is it in a strange perverse worship? Suburbia is spread
beneath a vast dark ceiling,
a grotesque model of peace,
and the first drop slides through the air.
But Mother Nature has a way of forgetting
and the false start leaves the cloud still hanging,
tantalizingly,
in the sky -
not threatening, just sleeping
like some wild beast.
(The air cries against our skin, warning, pleading - rain!)
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- | Submitted on 02/26/2009 |
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- Title: February
- Artist: deactivated-28347834753
- Description: A poem I threw together - comments are loved! :D
- Date: 02/26/2009
- Tags: rain cloud poem freeverse
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Quesadilya - 04/17/2009
- That was nice :33 5/5 But, maybe you could change 'like some wild beast' to 'like a wild beast'?
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- Iamthedarksideofthemoon - 02/28/2009
- Very good, 4/5
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- Googaabee2 - 02/27/2009
- I love it beautiful word choice. *Just joined Gaia*This was the first poem I saw on here and I am glad. 5/5
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- Nisa the Brown Nose Clown - 02/26/2009
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Its good but it is kind of... every where? A bit unorganized. But I liked the way you described the things!!! I gave it 4/5.
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