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yout touch is gentle, mine is kind!
your rose is black
mine is red
your leaking red
ii'm leaking black
we're a match!! smile heart heart
- by Olivia Anderson |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/26/2009 |
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- Title: red rose, black rose
- Artist: Olivia Anderson
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- Date: 02/26/2009
- Tags: rose black rose
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Comments (1 Comments)
- Sunafire - 03/04/2009
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I don't want to sound mean so i'll start of with the good point!
A very nice topic and idea behind it, contrasting the two people.
But you could improve it by perhaps having more structure, more metaphors etc biggrin - Report As Spam