A Night's Sky

• Artist: meerodi
• Description: Okay. So I got bored and my friend was like "Well why don't you try writing a poem?" So I wrote one. But then she said it was too depressing and to write a happier one. And that's how this came to be. If you like it I've posted other stuff which I hope you'll enjoy
  Also if you don't comment I will become parinoid, think I suck at writing, and not post for a couple weeks. (I'm pathedic) Tell me where I can improve!
• Date: 02/28/2009
• Tags: night stars moon

The sun sinks
into the horizon
and a weaker light
begens to come.

The stars begin to glitter
brightly in the air
and the moor shines
blocking away fear.

But still some ignore
the moon's comforting light
not thanking what they have
looking for something more bright.

Instead they feel the cold
instead they quiver in their fears,
they watch the darkness
through the blur of tears.

But still some rest
in peace and love,
knowing something other than the moon and sun
protects them up above.

Comments

[imaustin55]

to tell you the truth its really old fashion....lots of nice visuals but they've already been seen and done that way b4 millions of times...i give it a 4 because as much as pple dont say it you can really make anything rhyme haha and even so you dont always have to rhyme

[meerodi]

yeah. sorry for the corny ending and the fact that some parts don't rhyme xp

[TR-kister]

Wow, I really like it. Lots of sensory details. 5/5

[-x-Nivera_Mist-x-]

I love it. It's nice... Um... The first and second stanzas don't rhyme much and the 3 line on the last stanza kinda threw the rhythm of the poem off. That just my opinion. I would say 4/5