The Black Night

• Artist: fleurs sauvages
• Description: i was camping one day, and i thought of this, please rate fairly. im new at this sorta thing. please give me constuctive critisism :)
• Date: 03/06/2009
• Tags: black night

The moonlight streaks across your face
Whisper to the stars
Out of the galaxy
Into the night
Flying across the stars
They call to you
You serenade them in their grace
They twinkle and twirl against the black canvas of the night
The moon shimmers against the black lake of the night
The fireflies twist and dance about
The beach is cold and wet
It moves with the water
A serene dance of the waves
They lap and kiss the darkness of the night
The green and ebony trees contrast the dancing waves
In a way so great
That only the true mountaineer can grasp
The beauty of the night

Comments

[The-Cowboy-Smuggler]

woah very good!! i suck at poetry! you're awesome at it!!

[Save-My-Day]

Great not excellent. But still Ill give you 4.5/5. If your going to do this more your on the right track.

[Kitten254]

it sounds very good and descripted....it sounds like something i would right when im sitting on the porch at night just looking at the moon and stars...^^ 5/5