love?

• Artist: EmoBananasStoleMyHomework
• Description: well, yes, i do feel this way. and yes, i was bored when i wrote this.
• Date: 04/01/2009
• Tags: love

shadows dissapear as night approaches
and all i wish is for you to be here
ive written your name on my wall a million times
one for each second i said to myself, "i love you"

your face consumes my mind
i cant think about anything else
if i did, i would die
and i hope you would even care

i dont even know if you know i exist
do you? i cant tell
because you ignore me
and never steal glances at me,
like i do to you.

Comments

[NostaIgia]

I like it! Just remember your grammar next time. ;P

[Xx Pink Sakura - chan xX]

There are a couple of things you can fix. Put capitals every time you start a new line and on the 'I'. When you say words like I've, don't, remember the apostorphe.
Very well written though. Why don't you post this on fictionpress?

[Nurse Katherine]

O_O thats exactly relates to me biggrin