My Dissection

• Artist: 290DarkStars
• Description:
  guss what? I wrote this poem becausesometimes I feel this way... either it be about a friend betrayal, a family gone mad, or just an inner demond torturing me inside...
  If you have the sence to read this..then COMMENT DARN IT! Dont bother rating if you wont tell me why you rated it that! OK? Tell me what you liked and what you hated! I wanna hear it even if it hurts. COMMENT!
  . . . you may read the poem now.
  
• Date: 04/05/2009
• Tags: dissection

I feel numb,
I feel blue.
Someone touches me,
but I don't know who.

Confused,
my thoughts run fast.
Dead,
for that's what I knew last.

"I died?"
I whisper to myself inside.
"I am not dead yet."
I try to open my eyes wide.

But I can't,
the man talks.
"A bullet to the head."
he says as he walks.

Confused,
cold and numb.
I troubleshoot my mind and think,
"ARE YOU DUMB?"

I might be numb and cold,
but certainly not dead.
Then I could feel something,
something inside my head.

Silent screams fill the room,
I begin to cry inside.
"Now" said the man,
"Let's see what happened when you died."

The numbness was broken,
by a knife to the chest.
Cutting downward,
I-I can't tell you the rest.

How can I be dead,
no heartbeat or motion of the soul.
But then how could I feel the pain,
and feel my chest become a whole.

They cut and minced,
until the room was a pool of blood.
8 hours of living hell,
and every lead was a dud.

8 hours I screamed,
and tried to bear the pain.
It changed all that I knew,
nothing was the same.

But why should you care?
for I am dead now.
You might not know who,
but at least you know how.

Comments

[Dumbshiit Dc-ed]

Excelent! O;

[Buttercup Veela]

i have n idea how u manage 2 show so much emotion in ur poems! its like a wonder 2 me! 5/5 for the ability 2 take emotion nd transform it into something completely differnt!

[Daddy Got This Account]

ok, so first i would like to congradulate you on your description, ^^ (cuz you dont care if its a mean comment) mmmk, now im going to give you a 5 because 1. i like the over all topic. 2. i really adore the last stanza "But why should you care?
for I am dead now.
You might not know who,
but at least you know how."

that reminds me of myself and my ex, ^^ that last stanza sent shivers down mt spine! great job. ^^

and 3. well, cuz, its an awesome poem by an awesome poet. ^^

[animewolf16]

Nice description, I feel the same way. As for the poem, great stuff there. I'm not sure what it is I like about it.. feeling numb until something happens, can't see it coming, if you do you can't do anything about it, no one knows or cares what they're doing to you, then the pain is all that's there, until nothing is left. I think I understand... 5