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the wind whistles on this cold winters night
the snow falling sloly all around me
all the birds have long since taken their flight
i lay high up in this old tree
staring, watching this beautiful night sky
by myself, the snow blanketing everything
i wait as my time drips slowly by
i myself being the only living thing
living in this moment forevermore
the snow blankets everything as a white powder cover
being alone nevermore
all of it embracing the world as a lover
this cold winters night is all i know
all i can hear is the lonely call of a single old crow
- by ColdxLunarsxXxRemorse |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/22/2009 |
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- Title: cold winters night
- Artist: ColdxLunarsxXxRemorse
- Description: this is a sonnet of what i feel and am... 14 lines of my life almost
- Date: 05/22/2009
- Tags: cold winters night
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Winter Masquerade - 07/24/2009
- Its good, but you didn't quite follow the structure of a sonnet :/ 14 lines, 10 syllables per. You got the rhyme scheme right, and the couplet at the end is right too. It's good, though. 4/5.
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- ColdxLunarsxXxRemorse - 05/25/2009
- the last line symbolizes that no one is out there and no one can save me. most people like ryhme scheme it keeps it a little less confusing and ok.
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- TheKhamaseen - 05/24/2009
- oh this was like good- then you ended it with 'all i can hear is the lonely call of a single old crow'- blew it. the final line, betrays everything the poem seemed to have been building to. also don't feel the need to have a rhyme scheme, despite what most people seem to think it worsens the writing.
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- ColdxLunarsxXxRemorse - 05/24/2009
- no comments???...anyone
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