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A life that's weary,
a soul without rest.
Everyday tried,
a punishment at best.
An oppressive spirit,
the heavy eyes.
A world of slumber,
delusional lies.
My body becomes frail,
I lose control.
I lie limp,
my heartless soul.
Confused and disoriented,
My body lies me to sleep.
I've sewed too much,
now I'm too tired to reap.
Damn my flesh,
this flesh like a cross.
Half of myself,
it's my own loss.
Can't pull myself up,
can't stay awake.
Can't fight hard enough,
not even for my sake.
My head falls,
a battle lost.
I fall asleep,
at a dreadful cost.
I rub my face,
but my body grows weak.
A cursed body,
an escape I seek.
Look at me,
failing my God.
Am I so weak,
that I require a prod?
How can I be tired,
I have the youth of a boy?
Cannot even save myself,
I only can destroy.
As if I had been enchanted,
by all the peace of the air.
Why do I embarrass myself?
slumber draws a stare.
I try to stay awake,
I rub my face.
I try to stay awake,
and start to pace.
Broken inside,
try to construct.
I am helpless,
helpless as I self destruct.
- by 290DarkStars |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/23/2009 |
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- Title: Dead Inside
- Artist: 290DarkStars
- Description: I wrote this when I was falling asleep in class...
- Date: 05/23/2009
- Tags: dead inside
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Daddy Got This Account - 05/24/2009
- oh dark, its wonderfully sad. its a great poem, and i can feel your emotions, but im so sorry you feel this way. dark, please let me know if i can help you in any way. :hugs: 5/5 and fav.
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- TheKhamaseen - 05/24/2009
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first i commend you on your ability to conform to the rhyme scheme while making it NOT horrid.
that said-
the word choice is mediocre at best.
the tittle: 'dead inside'... NO!
you have enough control of your phonetics to do a good job on rhyme scheme- if that is true, you MUST be able to do the same for your line length (number of Syllables per line) just tighten it up, it stumbles in some places.
finnaly-move away from the 'epic battle' images... you can do better i'm sure
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- Buttercup Veela - 05/24/2009
- it IS wonderful! aww! i really, really like it! infinity (i have no idea how to make the infinity symbol)/5!
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- xxlostlove_meiixx - 05/23/2009
- cool..
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- xRossariox - 05/23/2009
- Omg this is...Unbelievable just...wow it is wonderful ^^
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