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She was friendly
gorgeous
funny
and sweet.
They don’t know.
They don’t know
how she hated,
how she loathed,
the girl that stared back
pointing out every flaw.
They don’t know
how every night
she’d stare
and stare
andstareandstareandstare
and stare
at the blood rolling down her arms
and the tears rolling down her cheeks.
They don’t know
how she stopped eating,
how she let herself waste away
how she became nothing
with one little thought.
Now as she lays there
in a world
none of us have seen,
they don’t know
how she was able
to take her life so easily
- by betweenyouandme319 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/28/2009 |
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- Title: Know
- Artist: betweenyouandme319
- Description: Not my best but oh well
- Date: 05/28/2009
- Tags: know
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Comments (7 Comments)
- DDrox316 - 11/07/2009
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so sad, but i love it
i think this is how a lot of girls feel... its really sad to think that people out there are that desperate for attention but nobody is around to listen so they can't live anymore.. sometimes i feel kind of like that... but i just couldnt kill myself... my parents wouldnt be able to bear it - Report As Spam
- DJNOISE5 - 06/04/2009
- wow. o.o
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- Halick - 06/01/2009
- Why did she decide to kill her self?? o.0????
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- Cory Crunk - 05/30/2009
- smooth, keep it up bud. check out mine
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- prettycaity2 - 05/29/2009
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Oh My XD
I Loved This Best I Have Seen In Awhile....Keep Up The Work 5/5....I Don't Think Any Of My Work Is This Good XD - Report As Spam
- AshesOfWar - 05/29/2009
- good work, i rlly like it
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- Arkelle - 05/28/2009
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^^ I love this.
Very well written, stanzas are formed nicely.
I appreciate that the subject matter is a very relevant truth that needs to be told.
My only words of advice would be to not clump words like you did in line 15. If you do this, it seems unprofessional.
However I really loved it! ^^ Keep it up! 5/5 - Report As Spam
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