enemy's love

• Artist: stupidpeoplethesedays
• Description: A girl and boy are deeply in love. Although they are supposed to be enemys, they love eachother and try their hardest to be by eachother. In the end, they end up choosing their original path, and risk the most important thing in their lives: their love.
• Date: 06/08/2009
• Tags: enemys love

The hair of life is in the process or trimmimg
and i feel i must prevail
before i get overthrown by my old ship sailed.

The line of Light is thinning
for every second i Waist
with You my Fued
our Destiny awaits
to kill for thrill
our Enemy's Race

And now our paths are Chosen
and we may Not agree
but the Sacrafise we will soon make
is bigger than everything

Comments

[XxthecriticxX]

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Yours Truly,
The Critic
P.S. You could work on spelling but so could everyone else *cough*Disastress of the Night*cough* Your poem rocked though.

[sydcole]

Very thoughtful I really like the way you describe it. I always think thought that love really was the most important thing so. yes i like it very much. razz