Broken Shards

• Artist: Aki-Yu77
• Description: A Poem about picking up the peices of her.
• Date: 07/01/2009
• Tags: broken shards

I look upon the shards of glass,
That lay crying beneth my feet.
I pick the shattered peices,
And place them in a mold
Though no mold is fit enough for
These peices of broken pain.
As I snatch up each shard
Fingers start to bleed,
And heart starts to race.
The affliction begins to set,
I advance my work further
Until I see the reflection
The wounds start to heal
As I look upon the puzzle
of tattered, cracked glass
I see the other side
The looks I get from it
Tell me that prize is true

Comments

[Sunafire]

It does have nice imagery and a nice style but there are too many poems on this theme, and you didn't include anything to make it stand out.

[onionio]

I liked the metaphors though I though your piece was a bit weak. I liked your word choice but I don't think everything was put together well. I'm not really sure how glass shards are tattered. Anyway, I liked how it ended and in general it was a good piece.