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One night Amanda went out with her boyfriend, Mark, they went to the movies, went for a nice and romantic dinner. Then, Mark took Amanda back to his place, she didnt want to ,but did. They got in his house and Mark started to kiss Amanda, she liked it and did it too. They fell to the floor... that night the sheets were messed up, the door was locked, and Amanda never went home that night.
A few days later Amanda got sick. She felt terrible, then Amanda started to think what could of made her sick. She started to remember the night Mark took her to his place. Amanda was scared, she went to the store and got an early pregnantcy test... she was pregnant. She was terrified. Amanda was only 16 and was pregnant. The next day she called Mark, and he was horrified. Was sad that he got a girl pregnant and he was the father. That one night changed everything...
Later, Amanda had a pretty baby girl, and put her up for adoption. Amanda and Mark learned that they were to young and should wait, and so should you.
- by CUTE prettyness13 |
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- | Submitted on 07/09/2009 |
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- Title: That Night!!
- Artist: CUTE prettyness13
- Description: One night and her whole world changed!!
- Date: 07/09/2009
- Tags: night
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Atheshya - 02/16/2013
- Or, y'know, use birth control. That works pretty well too.
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- Alvin Sul - 12/06/2012
- lol it's been years since i've looked at this one post, my older account is vll cloudlstrife vll haha i still think it was a good story x3
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- I Am mau - 08/06/2012
- i luv this story its soo sad GREAT JOB!! smile
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- Slinkenhofer - 05/27/2012
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Amanda was scared.
Amanda was terrified.
Those sentences are boring.
Beyond you posting this in the wrong arena, your writing leaves a lot to be desired. You're writing a story, not listing events. Don't tell us what happened; show us. Show us how Amanda was scared through her actions, show us what happened when Amanda gave birth. Don't tell us we should wait, make us want to wait through sheer horror of what Amanda had to go through.
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- Gigi Spce - 10/10/2010
- Totally! this message was transfered to the readers quite well.
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- peace-keepers-suuck-xD - 08/05/2010
- GOOD JOB!!! i really like it. u did pretty good! :3
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