Human Mind

• Artist: 15inuyasha
• Description: I wrote this poem about the human mind collapsing. Its different then what normally people put up so just want to do something different.
• Date: 07/11/2009
• Tags: human mind

Life is a pile of leaves that was blown away from the trees
As we descend to the ground, we slowly decompose
Animals and people constantly step on us
We are left in solitude
As the sun beam on us, we are set on fire by its strong heat
Our memories burning away and when we turn to ash,
We are blown away by the wind.

Comments

[Captain Delacroix]

"As the sun beams on us." I like the idea you had for this poem but try to just use words that are necessary. Less is more. Let the reader try to decipher what you're trying to convey. Makes them feel smarter wink