The Cave

• Artist: Agito Z Wilder
• Description: I have no faith in my writing whatsoever...yet i still do it...ahh well..hope u enjoy it :)
• Date: 08/11/2009
• Tags: cave

Darkness envelops me.
Finding it hard to see.
No light appears.
Seems to confirm my worst fear.
No-one seems to care.
I'm in the Devils Lair.

Eyes start to follow.
Never keeping still.
Wondering if I'll make it.
Yet I seem to fill.
With Fear and Dread.
Not gonna make it.
Start to lie Still.

As they appear.
So does my fear.
Will for help.
Never comes.
Once again.
Sound of Drums.


Beasts and Foes.
Start to nibble.
At my toes.
Slowly makes there way up.
Start to Scream.
The worst site.
I've Ever seen.

My blood on the floor.
On the walls.
As they converge.
I start to fall.

This is the end.
For me.

Comments

[meet ur angel]

I like it, it has nice rhythm, and I can picture the darkness in this poem... i like your writing style, it is inspiring, keep it up, I am itching to read what else you make

[VocaloidAkashaUniverse]

i love it! rock on!

[Yan Qi]

4/5
Positive: I like the rhythm and imagery of this poem. Quite good!

Negative: A few more adjectives would be nice.

Overall: Great poem.

[Agito Z Wilder]

me neither...funnily enough,..my mynd can picture it though :

[P00R L3N0]

i liked it. A bit depressing. I cant imagine being eaten alive...